很多次当我看见native speaker的美文时，都忍不住在欣赏的同时暗暗揣摩他们的构思、文法和谴词造句的功底，譬如J.K Rowling笔下的人物一个个都如此栩栩如生，她用词千变万化，引人入胜。那么，是不是我们就无法达到这样的境界呢？答案当然是否定的拉！我曾看过一篇某高校非英语专业学生的文章，文笔和意境都让我自叹不如，汗。。。 所以只要下了工夫，用心钻研，一定是会有回报的哦！我相信通过日积月累的不断学习，大家都能用英语写出让老外惊羡的漂亮文章！！

我的写作老师曾大力推荐过我现在所参考和使用的这本写作书，那么就让我们从最简单的开始，共同学习北外前辈们的智慧成果吧：

第三期：好的句子 I

1.完整

完整是好句子的第一要点。一个完整的句子表达单一的完整的思想，它不包含并不紧密相关的意思，也不表达本身不完整的思想。

Faulty: Du Fu was one of the greatest poets.

Revised: Du Fu was one of the greatest poets of the Tang Period.

第一句话有毛病，因为所表达的思想并不完整：时代和国家都没有提到。

加了the Tang Period句子的意思就清楚了：我们都知道唐是中国历史上的一个朝代。

2.连贯

连贯是指句子各部分之间清楚而合理的联系。句子中的词语和部分应恰当地衔接，它们之间的关系应十分清楚。不连贯的句子通常有以下几种毛病：平行结构有缺点，代词指代不清楚，修饰语和被修饰语的关系不明确，在人称、数、语态、时态或语气上有混乱之处。

Faulty: A man is judged not only by what he says but also by his deeds.

Revised: A man is judged not only by what he says but also by what he does.

A man is judged not only by his words but also by his deeds.

平行的意思最好用平行的结构来表达。此句中的what he says与his deeds在形式上不平行，所以应改动其中之一。

Faulty: To get ready for the trip, all the things she needed were put into a suitcase.

Revised: To get ready for the trip, she put all the things she needed into a suitcase.

此句中有所谓的“悬垂”修饰语（To get…）。它与所要修饰的名词或代词没有结构上的联系。那个名词或代词有时甚至不在句中；即使在句中，也不应被现有的修饰语所修饰。因为用了“悬垂”修饰语，这种句子就缺少连贯性，也就让人难以理解了。

Faulty: The idea he mentioned at first sounded good.

Revised: The idea he first mentioned sounded good.

The idea he mentioned sounded good at first.

此句中的at first即可修饰mentioned，又可修饰sounded，这种摸棱两可的修饰应该避免。

这期的作业：

１.请改正以下病句：

·Faulty: We thought she was charming, intelligent, and a very capable young woman.

·Faulty: He was knocked down by a bicycle, but it was not serious.

2.请在改正以上答案的基础上，任意挑选一句作为文章的开头写一篇６０字左右的短文。内容可以自由发挥：）

参考答案：

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1. We thought she was charming, intelligent, and very capable.

We thought she was a charming, intelligent and very capable young woman.

2. He was knocked down by a bicycle, but was not badly hurt.

短文略。